It's Cold In Your Shadow

"No one knows my name
They only know your's
You are the title wave
Beating on my weakened shores

I crouch behind your lime light
And protect my sensitive eyes
Sudden light hurts me
For so long I've been in disguise"

Wonderful !! its so deep and touching. I can totally understand what your saying. Its great.

I think my favorite stanza was the third one, with the last line in that stanza being my favorite in the intire piece. I liked what was being said overall, and yet again, I liked your viewpoint. However, I do feel that your weakest line was your closing one. What was being said was important and good, but I just feel that this stanza was a little broken up, and didn't flow as nicely as the others. Sorry.

Brad

That's sad. It doesn't make me like this person much either lol. I like how you tied it all together and stayed to the same no sun theme.

fav line.. please give me something outside of your ego.

As i read this i felt trapped within it...not one word wasted, far beyond a "touching" poem, truly fluid and emotionally inescapable, i didn't just see the picture you painted here, i became part of it...simply awesome piece...
john

A wonderful written poem , I loved it and it has so much to say in so few words, you did an excellent job on this one , keep it up a pleasure to read ,,, your friend Tracy d ~~~~~~~~~ 5/5