You are the title wave
Beating on my weakened shores

I LOVE LOVE LOVE when you put imagery in your poetry. You are so good at it. This one really caught me. This reminds me of someone inparticular, but not sure if it's for them or not. But anyhoo...this is a great piece! It's amazing! Especially good last stanza and last line!!!!
:)
Charisma*

Wow, this one's really good!

One of my faves from you. You write such amazing pieces!

"I crouch behind your lime light
And protect my sensitive eyes
Sudden light hurts me
For so long I've been in disguise"

That stanza was great! Such a wonderful subject to write about and you've wrote in such it in such an interesting way..

I'm gushing now, lol but it deserves a 5/5!
*Gem*

"You are the title wave
Beating on my weakened shores

I crouch behind your lime light
And protect my sensitive eyes
Sudden light hurts me
For so long I've been in disguise"

^^How I love those lines. Such beautiful, vivid imagery that created such strong pictures in my mind.

Despite being relatively short, you managed to put so much emotion and depth into this piece.

The flow was good throughout the piece, and the feelings in this are easy for the reader to see.

Filled with such melancholy, yes, but a beautiful write nontheless.

This is powerful. I like the topic that you picked, and I can relate to some emotions that you portrayed here. Whole poem is very good, it has perfect flow and I like your descriptions a lot.
My favorite stanza is:

-I crouch behind your lime light
And protect my sensitive eyes
Sudden light hurts me
For so long I've been in disguise-
^^
captivating part of the poem, I could clearly imagine it.
All in all, you did great work on this piece, and truly touched me.
Keep up!

A wonderful written poem , I loved it and it has so much to say in so few words, you did an excellent job on this one , keep it up a pleasure to read ,,, your friend Tracy d ~~~~~~~~~ 5/5

As i read this i felt trapped within it...not one word wasted, far beyond a "touching" poem, truly fluid and emotionally inescapable, i didn't just see the picture you painted here, i became part of it...simply awesome piece...
john

That's sad. It doesn't make me like this person much either lol. I like how you tied it all together and stayed to the same no sun theme.

fav line.. please give me something outside of your ego.

I think my favorite stanza was the third one, with the last line in that stanza being my favorite in the intire piece. I liked what was being said overall, and yet again, I liked your viewpoint. However, I do feel that your weakest line was your closing one. What was being said was important and good, but I just feel that this stanza was a little broken up, and didn't flow as nicely as the others. Sorry.

Brad

"No one knows my name
They only know your's
You are the title wave
Beating on my weakened shores

I crouch behind your lime light
And protect my sensitive eyes
Sudden light hurts me
For so long I've been in disguise"

Wonderful !! its so deep and touching. I can totally understand what your saying. Its great.