I echo Sunny`s sentiments on this piece, the flow was incredible and well written. Timothy r

Great piece, very deep and excellently written, I like it from the beginning to the end. Whole poem is simply breathtaking, it really make me think.
Keep up!
5/5 from me

Very cool, though I do believe if you were to keep with the seemingly intended syllable count, then "Veiled by" should have one more syllable. "Veiled" is only one after all.
I liked this write. I felt like I knew where you were going and the word choices were excellent until I got here:
Veiled by
Envy's
Stare.

At which point I felt like I was missing something. I couldn't quite understand what you were getting at. Envy of what? Anyway, that could be me being a terrible analyzer of poetry! Or you did what a lot of poets do... and wrote something because it sounds cool, not because it has meaning.
Only you know which it is.

Another good write!