I absolutely loved this! I don't know what else to say, it was great and I completely felt the words.

Your last line was very good. I liked the idea of your internal as well as end-line rhyme scheme, but i think that at times your internal rhyme scheme wasn't quite right, or didn't stay the same throughout. But it was a great idea that you did a much better job of pulling off than I think I could have. Good poem. Glad you found it to post!
Charisma*

Oh I loved reading this poem aloud to one of my friends, the words just rolled off my tongue making it more delightful to read :)

the feelings in this poem really stood out, and the imagery could be clearly seen.

"Hearts on the line are designed to be burned."

That was my favorite stanza among all :)

still a 5/5 :)