I found this to be original and unique in concept and beautifully written. the flow was flawless throughout and the imagery you portrayed was breathtaking it created very vivid pictures in my mind. i liked the repetition you used, sometimes it can kill the poem but you pulled it of wonderfully. && i think this should go in the sad category...and you'll get more views there lol

I agree 100% ^.

It's like they took the words write out of my mouth. I love your desciptive writting, and yoru vivid imagery.

Keep writting,
--Elly.

Hi Tammy,

I don't know but in some way this poem reminded me of my own mother, she's always such the care taker and she always put others first. Overall i really enjoyed reading your poem it was written very good.
As for the category i think it would be a good fit in the sad category or in the poems about life.

Take care,

angelique

*****

Your descriptive words, you have improved so much, you are an ace, well done....

5/5 David

Good!

Hey, for this one, i like the concept as well as the style of your writing. Every lines were filled with thoughts and hidden message on it!

keep it up!

Fantastic write. The imagery was strong, and the repetition of the first line is very powerful. I like the concept as well.
5/5

It's a love poem.. Love for others. Love and faith for others. I think it should go there.

I REALLY like this. You tell so many good stories about the benefit others in your poetry. It's pure and sweet, to be honest.
You had very good form, vocabulary, and everything. I can't critique; only say very good job. I'm fond of what you've done here. One of the best I've read today.

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Hey, this is a great write. I love the repetition and your use of language, it makes the piece really powerful.
Well Done
DnB

Fro the title itself up to the content shows your deep sadness and it was really revealed as i continue reading your work.. i find this uniquely written piece of your heart. i somehow agree on this poem, there are people who are willing to listen and help other people from their problems but there are times when you're in need there are some people. whom you expected to be there the most aren't there.. the thought of it makes me feel gloomy. good writing!! keep it up