Nice. I like it.

Wow, short an simple but very well written, Really like it!

Well, it flows well. There are some good parts with imagery yet I think by somehow...using less "you's" it'll be better. I do like that the image about the setting taking place at night. I'm not sure but I'm thinking work more on imagery in later pieces and see where that leads to.
~Faith-less

Overall a good poem and its not bad. Good word choice and good flow. rhyming is also good. Tc