Ohhh.
Honest to God, I didn't see any mistakes. A few places I seen words that could have been jumbled around to sound better, but at the same time they fit it perfectly. Because, they sounded and flowed just right. If that makes any sense.

Okay, what I mean is for OTHER poems they could have been jumbled around, but for this one they fit. [[Much better explanation. Haha.]]

You did a wonderful job sweetie. (:
Keep it up.