Why won't you call!

This is an okay poem not bad ...I kinda relate to it though.

Ok I'll start with the positives ..

~Positives~
As always; filled with emotions, it's basically a calling card of yours that this will be written with nothing but raw emotion. You held the flow of the poem nicely throughout the poems entirety.
You got your point/message across perfectly, as you have seemed to do in most of your work.

~Negatives~
It seemed forced right from the very first line, now I'm not saying these things didn't happen to you .. but you maybe didn't pick the best sentences to use to express them to their fullest. The one thing I have noticed from all your other poems is just how truly genuine they are... This was lacking in that respect.

If I was to simply read the text, it would be a fine piece of writing - but as soon as you look deeper .. it loses that shine.

Not your best work, but if re-worked I'd be more than happy to comment it .. hopefully in a whole new light!

~Pete.

I liked this poem it was short and" a little too much throughout this poem because it seemed forced in some places but that is just my personal opinion. The piece held some good emotion with in it though I didn't find it to be that interesting it still expressed your feelings in depth. Nicely done. ~Mel

Lovely
short & beautiful

keep it up
love
amy

This one makes me sad cause i know what ur feelin.