Once again well written and a joy to read..5/5

I enjoyed this. i found it to be both original and unique in concept, and written with such beauty and elegance. beautiful ending, so much power and intensity, much like the whole piece.

Awesome poem! I could picture everything as i read it...very well written and beautiful...

I sense a recurring theme with this ghost thing, but i think it gives you an insightful edge for your poetry. this poem was well written with a strong message

your servant:
atticus

Wow. it was totally amazing. i loved every word of it. the imagery was perfect and i thought it was great. 5/5

The fire comes forward
Mocking me as it dances
The door is coming forward!
Right on top of me, I have no chances

loved those lines^^^

WOW. I LOVE IT. UR IMAGINATION IS TO DIE FOR!

I loved the meaning you portrayed behind this poem, It was interesting and didn't bore me what so ever. The length was good not too long and not too short. The word choice was simple which was alright but I think you could of made this poem a tiny touch more deeper with using more vivider words. None the less a good effort. Well done. ~Mel

Its kinda interesting!

ilike the ending!

All the way through this piece I was feeling anxious for the subject. Wondering how they would react to being trapped and facing their impending doom. I must tell you, you did a great job of switching it around. After the last line .. I envy the subject .. Free as a bird!

Its nicely written and uses rather nice imagery (for the most part), I would possibly reconsider the head servering scene - it's maybe just a bit gory.

It flows very nicely, never seeming forced or pressured. The second to last line could possibly do with 1 more syllable in it, its the tinciest bit short.

~ Summary ~
Darkly despairing feelings - topped with a feeling of joy for the freedom he/she now has.

~Pete.