I liked this poem, It was quite an enjoyable read to tell you the truth and you portrayed a love piece nicely. I like the repetition of the last line in each stanza and I also liked how you did not use the repetition in the very last stanza of this poem. I wasn't so keen on how you put 5 lines into the last stanza to be it threw the flow off a tiny touch but not enough to reuin it. Well done. Overall a 5/5 from me. Keep writing. ~Mel

Oh no no no no!

I love this piece, it portrays such wonderful emotion in so few lines. I don't like that you left me hanging on this cliff edge without telling me what the mist is .. I guess you are leaving it to the readers perception. C'mon .. you gotta tell us. We can all imagine that the mist is .. Dismay, Betrayal, feeling forlorn, Hurt, Agony etc.. As the reader i would love to be told which feeling you were being administered by the cruel intentions of the other.

On the whole a wonderful piece, nicely written and beautiful flow.

[5/5]
~Pete.

You going to tell me what the mist is yet?

(^^ ,)

Very well writen piece, it flowed wonderfully...and captures the emotion so well. (I'm curious, what's the mist?)

Extremely sad yet true poem. Sometimes when something is empty, something mysterious filled it in, in this case mist.

5/5

I can totally relate to this poem. I've had some "mists" come into my relationships before.

I like the rhyming, repitition, and symbolism used throughout the poem.

Good job.

5/5

Aww! That was so sad. I can relate to it too. I loved the word choice and the title and the meaning in the poem. Overall, Great Job! 5/5
*~NearlyCrazy6~*

I really like it all of it your style everything