Shinobi,
I think the flow was just a little off, but that might be me ^_^ I like the topic that you chose, and you were able to describe it really well!
This was a pleasure to read!
I have nothing to critisize, so keep it up, 5/5

With all due respect,
Hatori

P.S. Do you remember me?

I like the repetition of the first stanza, for it was a very sweet one. The was great here as well. A very pleasant read.

marcella

I really liked this one beacuse your flow was perfect and your rhyming helped it bounce along quite lovely. amazing job

5/5