This is the 3rd poem i have written and it it wat me and mi sister felt like wen our grandad was taken away from us on boxing day x

Hey i like your poems they all have like a great consept to them but some of were you try to rhym them seems realy forced and some of the words you use dont seem to fit...but i still realy like them so 5/10 for the actuall writein but 9/10 for the thought and consepts of them :)

oh and thank you for the comments on mine i realy apriciate it :) much luv lee xx

Thanx for the advice xx