Comments : Dont Try

  • 16 years ago

    by cass

    Wow that reali good for ur first poem!!! very well expressed...deep n clear!!!
    I like alot!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by KJ

    Great job on emotion and vocabulary...short but it says a lot. 5/5

    PaSsIoNaTe kIsSeS

  • 16 years ago

    by kate

    This is amazing honestly.
    people should deff. look at the different point of view you know what i mean like you did in your poem instead of seeing how that person is hurting, think if it was actually you for once.
    very well spoken and out said.

    keep it up.
    keep on writing.
    love always and forever.

  • 16 years ago

    by Jason Meres

    *wraps a shawl around his shivering bones.* Well, a minute ago I wouldn't have been able to imagine how you feel, so I would have taken your advice and "Not tried." But after reading your words I feel it quite realistically. Do you have any hot chocolate?

  • 16 years ago

    by Scarlet Angel

    Thats really good!! nice images. also thnx 4 commenting on my poem!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by killcupidxoxo

    Wow really good first poem, and its totally true too. keep it up! :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Beautiful Catastrophe

    I really liked this one.
    great job expressing how you feel.
    i can definetly relate.
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by paul alexander

    Like your poem

  • 16 years ago

    by AmberSherrellxxIve Been Sitting Here Trying To Find Myselfxx

    This poem was a little short for my taste but it was well written and thought out so it made it really good.5/5

    <3Amber

  • 16 years ago

    by TwistedAngel xx

    I really like the poem
    everyone always says they know how u feel but u think itd be really bad if they really did know how u feel.
    lol
    and thanx for commenting my poem.
    keep it up
    xx

  • 16 years ago

    by pLeASeTakEMyHeArT

    This is really smooth, I mean I am related to this. This is gunna added to my favorite poem. THIS IS WHAT MADE ME FEEL SOMETHING WEIRD THAT REALLY HAPPENING TO ME RIGHT NOW. I finally found the moment to this. I love this!

  • 16 years ago

    by SCARECROW

    Wow, for a first poem, it's very good!
    Nice use of vocabulary, and good on you for actually sticking to your flow and not being all-over-the-place.
    5/5, well done!

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Well it was a great poem it was even your 1st. well done. My first poem wasn't good lol. Keep up the good work. you have the potential to improve :)

  • 16 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    This is so cliche.
    Everyone can say this.
    This isn't written from the heart.

    I'm sorry, I'm not trying to be rude.

    I just really try to encourage people to reach into their hearts and write.
    And that's really want you need to do.

    This poem doesn't express any emotion. It's just words to me.
    It doesn't rhyme, flow, or present itself in anyway.
    I'm sorry.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 3.5

  • 16 years ago

    by sexyCheckers

    I liked the ending alot...
    I can relate to it cos I had when peoples try to compare their life to mine... Like it really aggrivates me... And like they got no idea what im going through and how i got no one to help me deal with it and shit
    annnndd yeaaah

    nice poem luvvv
    xxxxx

  • 16 years ago

    by xBxRxOxKxExNx

    I love it!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Beautiful Forever

    Very good poem. It was decently written with a good flow. The concept was really great as well...

    "Don't try to imagine how I feel,
    Just imagine how you would feel,
    If this was happening to you"

    ^^ This ending was terrific. It was well written and had emotion to it. It also had a very good meaning behind it that a lot of people should look at.

    Very good write! 5/5