This was amazing!! so creative and original even tho it was based on the lines from a song. you always keep me in awe of your formed poetry.

Whoa. I really like this poem! it was so full of emotion and i love how you tied in those lines from the song! It was very original and creative. I love it!

Secret Wish,
This poem was simply amazing!! I have never read one in this style before, and your words blew me away. You have an incredible vocabulary, and the rhyming was dead on! The flow was there too ^_^!
What really made me like this poem was the topic though. It held so much meaning and you brought it all out in this piece of art ^_^
This was a pleasure to read, so keep it up! 5/5

With all due respect,
Hatori

Your imagery, your organization and rhymes makes this poem shine as sunlight! It's beautiful and I can't say there's anything wrong with it! 5/5 Would you mind r/r/c: "Legend", "Gift Of All Time",
"Teams With Dreams", "A Slave Life Again", and "No End".

I liked the p.s. part at the end the best, good format and pacing but the improper english on that one line really withdrew my interest

your servant:
atticus

". . . when once I stood proud. . . " << For some reason from ". . . stood proud. . . " into the next line was a bit off flow.

"Once thought you were the one, now nothing makes sense" << That line as well is a bit off flow. Maybe try:
" I thought you were the one, nothing makes sense." ?

"Questioning ever second" << every*

It was a good poem, but you had a LOT of commas that weren't needed, at all. And a few that you could have gotten rid of, but were okay where they were. Glosa Verse is hard for me to write, so I really really enjoyed this poem. YOu did a wonderful job on it, and it's quite an amazing poem. It seems so easy when others do it. Lol. I can do just about any of them but this, gah. You did a wonderful job though, darling. Keep it up. (:

Omg! you have so much talent! you show so much emotion and i love it! your writing is just plain amazing! i dont even know like what to say! it was great! lol 5/5 keep it up! lol

LOVE LOVE LOVE IT! I really am intrigued by this poetry style and am hoping to try it soon. I thought this was really good especially because it's such a long poem.
You had one grammar error you used the word 'to' where it should have been 'too' as in "it's TOO much!" It's in your last stanza line 6. Hope it helps!
*me*

This poem is really good<3

Wow... whole poem is excellently written, filled with touching emotions. The third stanza is my favorite, there is so many heartfelt feelings in it.
You did an amazing job with this piece, I tried to write glosa vere myself, but I wasn't so successful, but you inspired me to try again.
Every line is great, so descriptive, I enbjoyed in this piece from the beginning to the end. The flow of the whole poem is excellent, too.
Keep writing!
5/5 from me

A great poem full of heart and love and loss. I love how you can manipulate your reader to feel some kind of emotion when they read your poems its really good. The structure and the layout all suits the type of poem and I cant tell you how to make it any better because I wouldnt know how lol xxx alex xxx

Well, I'm amazed by your poem!!!

Wow i loved it your VERY talented. 5/5 check out some of my poems if you'd like
-erin

I love this poem alot..Sad..but nice flow of words!! 5/5