by StormyStar Oct 9, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
Looking down deep inside |
by Jenni Marie
"putting her things into a bin." <-- that made no sense at all to me, i felt you'd put it there just to fit the rhyme scheme. the amount of fillers you used in this (I, you, the, etc) really made this poem seem very off putting to me. it was like they were there just for the sake of it, and not only that it totally destroyed the flow in a lot of places. i thought this had a lot of cliche's in. for example "go a thousand miles" and the actual storyline behind the poem. the imagery you created was beautifully done it created very vivid pictures in my mind and i found the ending line to be adorable. i didn't think that this needed to have such long length, towards the last few stanzas it seemed to be dragging on. |
by jLegendc
Shiet! that's one long poem! very good tho.. i didn't get bored.. all the way i felt lyk i was in another world.. |
by Kasey
It was long... but ok |
That was lengthy but good... |
Wow... 5/5... it's brilliant.. so emotional... if only i knew of a love so strong... |