"clue why I am feeling this pain"
^^ Usually I'm quite fond of the AM instead of I'm, because it's more powerful, more bam. But in this poem . . . I think I believe differently. There's always exceptions for everything, eh.

" Someone, anyone, no one is here."
^^ ". . . anyone - no one. . . "

Hmm. I really like this, darling. It's quite a good poem. With deep emotion, and great words. The flow is good as well. (: