Gopher Exellence.

by Teria   Oct 9, 2007


Achieve your highest goals, bring forth your largest dreams.
Take back good memories, for life's more than what it seems.
With tainted thoughts of gold, burning through your flesh.
Pick up your vile self, and clean up this evil mess.
I beg your lonesome mind - take back all you've lost.
For what's right is right and you must not pay a faulty cost.

Your dreams wandered further than your own imaginative mind.
Darling, you've crashed my gopher excellence, in all you've left behind.

You see the wondrous thoughts crashing down on I?
They're what's taking so long to bring forth the silenced cry.
I can feel it in your arms, the pain you seem to withhold.
And, it ruins what I've created, a heart unbarren and so uncold.
How far have I pushed you? - Oh, I see too far.
I can't seem to grasp reality of where you really are.

Your dreams wandered further than your own imaginative mind.
Darling, you've crashed my gopher excellence, in all you've left behind.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Ashlee Nicole

    Wow this one i think is my fave... I feel like people could all relate to it differently

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    This is beautifully written...heartbreaking and filled with melancholy, yes, but still so beautifully written.
    I thought the flow was flawless throughout the entire piece, and the imagery you portrayed in this was wonderfully done, it creates very vivid pictures in the reader's mind.
    The only thing I didn't like, was the amount of "I's" you used. But other than that, I wouldn't change anything about this.

  • 17 years ago

    by Fsams

    Very well written poem and having a good flow. I dont think the line "You see the wondrous thoughts crashing down on I?" is grammatical. I guess it should be ...down on me. I can see that just for the sake of rhyming you have used I. But not a big prob

    tc
    Fsams

  • 17 years ago

    by nikki

    It was very powerful, a great emotional piece. you have such a talent with your words, it is just amazing. i loved every word of it and again it was flawless.
    nicely penned
    5/5

    nikki

  • 17 years ago

    by NearlyCrazy6

    Wow. that was really emotional and powerful! <33! The flow was great and so was the word choice. I love it. 5/5

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