Wow. that was really emotional and powerful! <33! The flow was great and so was the word choice. I love it. 5/5

It was very powerful, a great emotional piece. you have such a talent with your words, it is just amazing. i loved every word of it and again it was flawless.
nicely penned
5/5

nikki

Very well written poem and having a good flow. I dont think the line "You see the wondrous thoughts crashing down on I?" is grammatical. I guess it should be ...down on me. I can see that just for the sake of rhyming you have used I. But not a big prob

tc
Fsams

This is beautifully written...heartbreaking and filled with melancholy, yes, but still so beautifully written.
I thought the flow was flawless throughout the entire piece, and the imagery you portrayed in this was wonderfully done, it creates very vivid pictures in the reader's mind.
The only thing I didn't like, was the amount of "I's" you used. But other than that, I wouldn't change anything about this.

Wow this one i think is my fave... I feel like people could all relate to it differently