by SpEcIaLmE Oct 10, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
I love you |
It's really good! it totally moved me..! if only i could say the same about the boy i'm in love with... X |
by Sumit Ojha
Excellent poem... I like it... |
by StandStill
Very very beautiful! |
by Alissa
This was good, but I know you can do better. I felt it was a little bit of a cliche. Don't get me wrong, those are awesome to write about but it would be so much more interesting if you expanded on your vocab. Make me wonder what you mean yet give me a certain image. You just stated everything in this, Poetry should have depth. You can do that, you had it in your other poems. Just try to write from the heart, not your head. :) |
by Jason Meres
I'd say that's a pretty good start to telling someone how you feel. Not a bag middle or ending either. But i'm sure you've figured this problem out long ago without any help from me. *smiles* |