Comments : Heart

  • 17 years ago

    by ChrisT

    Great poem... thats true about the heart... one thing work on your rythm a little so it just slides off the tongue other than that awesome choice of words and has amazing meaning

  • 17 years ago

    by Nix

    Ending is very effective. Honestly I don't like first stanza, because repetition of-a heart- leaves really bad impression and it is totally needless. I suggest you to change it and put some metaphors to create more powerful atmosphere.
    All in all I like it, it has interesting rhythm and very deep topic. last eight lines are my favorite part of this piece. It is original and you wrote it nicely.

  • 17 years ago

    by Viola

    I like this..it's kind of a unique poem in regards to the fact that you picked the Heart to talk about, but I think that's great. I love poems that are not of the ordinary.
    And I have to tell you, I like free verse too, most of my poems actually are free verse. So that does affect the flow, if you don't rhyme...but I happen to think that free verse poems have the most emotion in them..because they are just simple words that come out of your heart and soul without having to be processed and though about or changed to fit the "rules' in any way.
    With all that said, I think the poem was great. It's all very true. A very enjoyable piece. Keep it up! =]
    --Viola

  • 17 years ago

    by xBehindTheseHazelEyesx

    This is amazing.
    its very original and it really expresses what you are feeling inside.
    i wish there were more poems out there like this. =]
    keep up the good work!

    -Taylor

  • 17 years ago

    by Blissful

    Beautiful piece of work you have here. Everything you spoke of was so true and I especially liked the ending, it tied the poem together so well. *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Connie

    I really enjoyed this poem very much. Makes ya stop and think, and realize just how true this is!