Without The Rain [Rictameter]

Very meaningful Rictameter. This poem makes you think, short yet well written and touching. keep it up, kel.

"Although, weep she will, until all is still"
Both commas throws off the flow a bit. So many people think that you should put commas in just because they're required in essays and such. But, in poetry when it's read allowed you're suppose to pause for the punctuation, not much but just a tad and then continue on reading. Well, if someone has too many commas, periods, etc. Then obviously all the pausing is going to throw off the flow a bit. I'd suggest taking the second comma out, but which ever you prefer is the way to go.

This is a nice poem. Short but well written. You have done a wonderful job expressing the emotion which in return has given you an almost flawless flow. You worded yourself perfect and overall put the piece together quite well.

A very well written piece, Cella. :)
I loved the words you used, the expressive imagination. It was all just very moving. Very beautiful. 5/5

Wow nice style! seems u have a great imagery for writing this..aside from the style of ur work i'd love also the words that u expressing.. i think it written very well and perfect! 5/5

A good read for me.. i liked your wording it made it easier for me to capture the image you portray.. nice job there.. even if it required the last line to have the same syllables, i liked how you repeated the first line.. it made the word "lifeless" linger in my mind..

~angel~