by Angie
OK first thing, since I'm such a stickler for spelling, lol.... you have the word "of" 2x and it should be "off".... other than that it flows and rhymes perfectly. |
This is really sad. i have a friend going through a quite bad ED at the moment and this poem really helped me to understand her better. i love how you referred to anorexia and bulima as ana and mia. I'm not sure if it was intentional but i felt as if by giving them human names they showed the amount of power and control they can have. i actually think this may be the first ED poem i have read on here. well done xoxo |
by Melpomene
Jenni, This piece was beautifully sad, I really can't express how much this poem hit my heart in so many different ways. You have a way with poetry, you make the reader feel what you are feeling, you express yourself in such great depth that it's breathtaking. I love your word choice, They seemed so simple and so effective. So many people i'm sure can relate to this poem. I loved how you used personification by giving the eating disorders actual names. It really made this piece come alive. Well done. Such a great read. ~Mel |
by Chelsey
Okay. I can honestly say thati loved that whole poem. |
by Wallace
Good job, the flow was awesome, and I like how you didnt try to make it too fancy just nice and easy. One stanza really stood out to me and it was this one; |
by Gem
Oh my... what a truly chilling yet amazing poem |
This was amazing as well Jenni. You have done such a wonderful work. The rhyming was good and the flow was awesome. Honestly this piece was great. Each stanza was very well written. |
I love this poem, it is so beautiful. It gives of all sorts of different meanings to different people. Its brilliant how people can reflect upon it in a soft or sincere way. Vunerability amongst young girls is vibrant and most of the time very painful to encounter or even watch you conveyed your ideas brilliantly here. Nice job xxx alex xxx |
by NearlyCrazy6
I really like this poem. It does have different meanings to different people like what alex said. I loved the flow and word choice but i think it couldve been longer and had some extra words to make it sound better. Overall though great job. |
by VYXSIN
Seriously deep and amazing, i really enjoyed reading this poem, i cant really make out what it means, maybe thats just me, but i really like this poem, so well written and emotional. |
by Robert
I am very pleased with this work, I loved the message and the description was very well played out your story telling capibility is great keep up the awsome work Plot121 |