Early Winter.

by Teria   Oct 11, 2007


Early Winter.

Mountain frost, oh mountain frost -
how you have betrayed me.

Wilted flowers, oh wilted flowers-
look at what you have done.

Pouring snow, oh pouring snow-
feel my bumps a'rising.

Falling leaves, oh falling leaves -
look at what you have done.

With a moment passing by,
faster than the tears you cry -
You see what's happened deep within,
chilled to the bone, with early winter skin.

So fragile, so pale and oh so broken -
healing with the power granted by strength,
with burdens cursing each intolerable sin.

Mountain frost, oh mountain frost -
how you have betrayed me.

Just look my darling, oh my darling -
look at what you have done.

With a moment passing by,
faster than the tears you cry -
You see, I know you see
deep within a broken me.

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  • 17 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Truly wonderful, I'm mesmerized by the beauty and sadness that your words hold. This poem has powerful, descriptive and metaphorical tone, rich with superbly created imagery. The flow of the whole piece is great.
    Whole idea for this poem is original and creative, and you expressed your emotion through it excellently.
    Keep writing!

  • 17 years ago

    by RobinAnn13

    Nice use of words, you managed to repeat yourself without ruining the poem too. Very nice work. <3<3

  • 17 years ago

    by ECILA ice

    Well you are really a poet.. with that kind of poem you brought up a gloomy ambiance of a person suffering from a broken love. i enjoy the imagery of some stanzas, i can almost feel the chill of sadness succumbing my soul. great work!

  • 17 years ago

    by Pete

    Very unique style, I guess this would not be to everyones palate. I Would normally prefer a rhyming poem, but this works just as nicely.

    Wonderful imagery used in this poem, really vivid.

    "You see what's happened deep within,
    chilled to the bone, with early winter skin."
    I think these are absolutely lovely lines, definitely the high point of the poem for me.

    I'm going to PM you regarding a vote on this piece.

    Quite nice work.

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