This is such a great poem, its very well written and it flowed perfectly.I felt what you felt and thats what poetry is all about to me.= ) 5/5

Cory

''Blue ocean still glazing, a bit of me with you died.''

My favourite line in this poem.
I've read it over a several times, and i enjoyed it with every read even more.
Good write.

5/5

xo Angelique

I honestly enjoyed this poem alot, I agree with the above that I thought from reading the title that this would be a cliche poem but turns out I was wrong. Supose it teachers me to never judge a book by it's cover. Your word choice was really interesting and the flow smoothe. The emotions portrayed were so delicate and written in depth. The story behind this poem was excellent. Such an enjoyable read that was well worth the time. Well done keep up the great work~Mel

Oh this one comprises a very meaningful and intimate/ vivd emotions.. wow!! a very nice poem, with very deep thoughts and meaning. I really did enjoy on this.. a broken hearted poem, that's what i can gaze and feel as i pursue on reading each lines. flawless.. and i can relate on this. keep it up!!

I absolutely loved it.
The last stanza was my favorite.. I also liked the line ''Blue ocean still glazing, a bit of me with you died.''
It was great.
two thumbs up!
keep writing, your really good.
5/5

Hey this was great! you chose great words and it really made the poem, it's short but it sends a message. it also lets me get a clear picture of whats going on in the poem. 5/5 do keep it up.

Short. simple. but full of emotion.
an amazing write. 5/5.

Honestly...i loved it...it was VERY well written. the flow and the word choice was terrific. it was full of emotions and it sent a strong message. 5/5 hun! Great Job. keep it up!

Jenna

I really enjoyed this. It was thought provoking and interesting. The imagery was great and the word usage amazing. Well done *5/5*

Wow this poem is awesome! I enjoyed reading it very much. The way it's worded makes the poem even better.

Excellent!

For this one, first I see the metaphors they're great. It was short but the message flowed on it nicely. Even though it is not a rhyming piece i can say that this piece is really excellent!

Keep on it!

Interesting poem. I thought here and there the flow was a little choppy, but you made up for that with the last stanza. I loved that stanza.

"Beach under beaming soft sun.
tears on my cheecks singing me a song. ['cheecks' should be 'cheeks'].
A memory, and the full moon,
With them, along, I gentley croon." ['gentley] should be [gently].

=) Good job.

Great poem, flowed nicely. Alot of great vocab your English teacher would have been proud. Haha, great job keep up the good work. 5/5

All i can say is wow. this poem was well written with good ppacing and good format, and yet i still could not get the whole "soul crubbles" part

your servant:
atticus

This was such a delicate poem, I can't think of any other way to describe it. I really enjoyed it. The emotion was strong, as was the flow and storyline. The ending was my favourite part, especially the last line, I think it wrapped this piece up nicely. You have a good choice of words here. Well done. :] 5/5

Tammie

This is so well written, the words are perfect, painting an awesome image...the emotions are clear and easy to relate to, omg its just wow!!!!!
5/5
- ali xxxxxxxxx