Little Black Dress (acrostic)

by Choose xX Alex Xx Life   Oct 15, 2007


Lovely velvet eyes, with gold powder enlightening her smile,
Innocent natural beauty, makes life worthwhile.
Tied little gold ribbon in her strawberry blond hair,
Taking her first steps in heels, high on fresh air.
Looking beautiful and young, pink rosy cheeks,
Enjoying each moment, month, day and week.

Blue eyes like the ocean a natural sight,
Looking forward to the rest of tonight.
A sparkle of glee as she leaves with her date.
Carefully planning her time as not to be late.
Keeping her cool, her posture as she walks through the door,

Dominating the looks as she heads for the dance floor.
Remember this day she shall for the rest of her life,
Everyone watching her dress float with each stride.
Singing to herself, this night is her best,
Stealing the evening in her little black dress.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Jaymes Haze

    This is fantastic.
    Growing up they teach us that an acrostic in supposed to be used for simple descriptions.
    Like Haze for example.
    Hard to see
    Annoying
    Z...
    Error

    And that has corrupted my attempts at it.
    But this, it is fantastically beautiful.
    It's a vivid description and it makes me want to attempt to break the barrier my simple education has placed on me.

    Thank you.

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    I don't understand one thing- you described the girl's hair as "strawberry blond", how does that color look like? I would say "strawberry red" because that somehow makes more sense to me but maybe I just misunderstood your description.

    All in all, I truly enjoyed in this piece. I like the imagery that you created, it is very vivid and I could clearly imagine every line as the poem unfolded, you did really great job with descriptions from the beginning to the end. Also, whole poem holds very captivating atmosphere which is memorable. I think that you did good job with rhymes, too because the flow of the whole piece is natural and really nice.

    Overall, fantastic poem, 5/5 from me.

  • 16 years ago

    by Nia Warfeld

    Amazing. I Think You have an AMAZING talent.

    Thx 4 commenting my poems

    X333 Nia

  • 17 years ago

    by Vincent Thornsberry

    Very well written. i like the emotional level. its woven into every word. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Bryan

    Another very good poem, i love acrostics and you did wonderfully with this one alex, i love the flow and your choice in wording was perfect, another 5/5 from me!!! keep them coming!!!

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