Short and there wasn't enough to show what's really going on here... but it still shows emotion ad it does put love in plenty of metaphores
keep writing

It was short but i understood wat u meant kinda left out a lil more detailsz dat culd have happened nxt tyme use more wordsz nd try 2 put more emition in it

Use more emotion next time... but it was good

Want to see more detail, but it has emotion and it good, just added more feelings into it. Keep it up!