Wow, this was greatly written poem, it was full of real emotions, keep it up dear

This poem was good but it didn't jump out at me. the beat was a little off at times. but i do like the fact that you tried to use simpler words.

Shannon, I don't care what anyone says - this is one of your best poems ever. I just adore it. :]] It was so... dark in a way. Just AMAZING.

"Nor hear the "Sorry" held in his throat.
All he wants is for you to curb his pain,
Just needs someone to give him hope."

^^ Those lines are my favorite, by far. Magnificent job, m'dear. Overall: 5.5

--- Stephanie Lynn

I thought this poem was written very well and I loved the title. After reading the poem I now understand why you chose this title and it's absolutely perfect. Great word choice and flow - very well done 5/5 GG23

Ilove this one.. the whole lines are very worded and u still carrying the flow.. it was great because the emotion was strong i can perfectly understand the whole stanza's i enjoyed this one! really great written and nice imagery 5/5