Excellent poem! I really admire your ability to use simple and seemingly casual phrases and insert them successfully into a poem with lots of meaning and depth. I enjoy your work a lot!

I love the repitition here. It really makes this piece wonderful. I feel like it's kind of an unconventional love poem, but it seems to hold even more meaning that way than had it been just like all the others. The poem really pulls the reader in and makes your eyes move down the page, which I congratulate you for... this can be very hard to do. 5/5