by musiqlover015 Oct 15, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
Can you take my hand |
This was a very strong poem, a lot of emotion in it. I think the only thing you can do is: rhyme. rhyming brings so much power to a poem. for an example you last line would have been amazing if it would have rhymed .. how about this: ? |