Awwww this one is cute also but a better cute i like this one more... LOL! i like the way you thought of this the way you did and the way you wrote and put the stanzas ... its a great.

At first i only liked the first 2 paragraphs, but then when i read it again i started to notice more the feelings u were describing instead of looking at the rimes. so i would say that feelings wise, n story wise this is a good poem, but rimes wise u've accustomed be to better... 3/5