by Dark Secrets Oct 16, 2007
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
I love the feeling... |
by Heba
This poem is really wonderful because it was written by a beautiful mind. |
by Gasttlee
This is catchy. I love how you made such an amazing imagery here. 5/5 |
by Pamela G
Keep read more, one step at a time. Don't give up. You can do it. When I start writing, I wasn't good at all. |
Stanza 2 has an ABCB rhyme pattern that doesn't tie in with this piece. A poem is either rhymed or unrhymed, combining them both sometimes works if done with extreme care, but it this case it just didn't gel, not for me anyway. Other than that, this is a moderately good piece. A little work and a quick edit to tidy it up would only serve to improve this. |