Aww loved the idea. Whole poem had a sad tone do it, and I really liked that. Easy to read and thanks to that easyer to connect with the poem. And it flowed just perfect.
Amazing job on this one!
5/5 Keep up!

This touched me good, on the real. It was just awesome! 5/5

Good job! i think you like the shorter poetry.. lol!! i want you to write more!!!! lol you are really good at this, if only every guy could write like this!! keep up the amaz-az-ing work! :o]

I love this one. the metaphor of game is really strong and powerful. probably you wrote about feeling like a pawn in chess:

"Untill a decision
Somebody makes..."

yay life sometimes seems to be like a game

and btw the repetition of

"where pain rules all
with tumult and strife"

is a nice idea, makes the poem complete

5/5
keep up good work)))