Wow, didn't see such a good expressed poem. The story is well written and rhymed. The structure is great. A definite 5/5

I enjoyed this poem very much, I thought the word choice and the imagery were fantastic, the flow was also great. The poem is very deep and I'm glad I took the time to read it - Excellent job 5/5 GG23

This is a wonderful dark poem, great imagery used throughout. I think what i like most about this piece is the short lines used in each stanza. Really enhances the rhythm of the poem.
My only bit of concern was this line..
"The desert, rocky valleys"
I personally think the 2 middle words should be swapped around...
"The rocky desert valleys"
It sounds better in my head. Just a personal thing, maybe.

Overall very nice job on this poem.
[5/5]
~Pete.

Excellent poem one thing though you used struggle a bit much find a synonym other than that this has been one of those poems that are timeless kool
Take Care
xHSx