Misty grey eyes will gaze
Gently pulsing heart will plead
To say the words that have escaped
But to hear them would be to admit
That this imagination existed
Something that can't be done
Sit in class together; silent
He stares into the distance
Ignorant, oblivious to the world
Cutting into her soul, but doesn't know
For his eyes see only thoughts
And all her eyes can see is him
Slowly starting to lose herself again
To the turmoil and stillness of love
Head reeling; heart overpowers mind
The mind that always said no
No longer has a say, no longer matters
She looks into his dark eyes
Finally he looks back, no longer in daydreams
She sees calm; like after the storm
It is dark and intruiging
But it must be dark to see the moon
And from him is where the moon glows
Luminescent; her own fragment of midnight
In this world full of sunlight.
The flow was okay. I think it would have been better in stanzas, though. It was just poewrful, and it was almost too powerful because the mind didn't have time to 'calm' down before it got powerful again.
The emotion was amazing, darling. As you already read, it was a bit poewrful due to the lack of stanzas. BUT, if there were stanzas that wouldn't be a problem whatsoever. Because, you'd have time to think, and the emotion wouldn't be BOOMBOOMBOOM. It would be BOOM BOOM BOOM.
The word choice, well . . . , WOW. It was amazing. You have a great vocabulary. The words just linked together so amazingly, and worked so well with the emotion and such.