Wow.
Amazing.
Very powerful, hun.

The flow was okay. I think it would have been better in stanzas, though. It was just poewrful, and it was almost too powerful because the mind didn't have time to 'calm' down before it got powerful again.

The emotion was amazing, darling. As you already read, it was a bit poewrful due to the lack of stanzas. BUT, if there were stanzas that wouldn't be a problem whatsoever. Because, you'd have time to think, and the emotion wouldn't be BOOMBOOMBOOM. It would be BOOM BOOM BOOM.

The word choice, well . . . , WOW. It was amazing. You have a great vocabulary. The words just linked together so amazingly, and worked so well with the emotion and such.

Keep it up darling.
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