It`s Us or the War, Choose Your Bullets Wisely [Collab]

by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG   Oct 22, 2007


Written with the amazing Michael, <33

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There`s a fine line between forever and good-bye, that I know,
But I think we crossed it by an inch, left with nowhere to go;
I can still see the pride you held, when you looked me in the eyes,
And told me you`d be leaving, the one word I`d come to despise.
The sky closed down around us, when I reached to hold onto you,
But you left me hanging, said there was nothing else you could do.
You sent a few letters back home, I read each one through and through,
Trying to capture the fear I know you felt, but tried not to show;
I analyzed every line you wrote, picking at your disguise,
But deep down, I knew you chose this war, and I was losing you.

No matter what I do the pain of leaving you still remains,
I did this for you, but I cant think of the words to explain,
I can still see the tears, when I told you that I had to leave;
Thoughts of memories linger, happiness is here to deceive.
I hoped you would be happy, I had never meant to hurt you,
But it seems I had done the opposite, if only I knew.
I wish that this war would end, because the end is overdue,
But the fighting still continues, and my heart feels so much pain,
One day we will be united, then my heart can be relieved,
But deep down I knew I chose this war, and now I have lost you.

-Jenna Elphick & Michael H
October 21, 2007.

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The CinqTroisDecaLa Rhyme, a form created by Laura Lamarca, consists of one 10-lined stanza with 15 syllables per line. The rhyme scheme for this form is AABBCCCABC.

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  • 17 years ago

    by pookiengurgi

    This is pretty good I especially like the line "I wish that this war would end, because the end is overdue"

  • 17 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Now, I haven't read many collabs, but I have to say - this is the best I ever have. I'm presuming you each wrote one stanza? I loved it. I loved how it moved from one's POV to the other. It showed the love and sorrow felt from both sides.

    Beautifully done, both of you.