Great job :]. acutaly i was writing a poem but i got writers block gah. anyway your poem gave me an dea for mine, dont worry i dindt copy you in anyway. 5/5

p.s r/c bk

The true meaning of pocession would be control I feel you gave that control away but there is no reason for why they want to pocess you what do you have they want this would I think make your work and message more clear for the reader to understand Plot121

Very good, I thought it was nice and simple and easy flowing. Maybe alittle too simple on the otherhand. Could bea little more creative. But it was a good try. And I see no reason to not give it 5/5