There is alot of betrayal in this piece but not a lot to let your reader understand or have any background to your being distraught. I think if you gave more infomation to the reader this would be the powerful piece you intended it to be Plot121

Very good. Very simple easy flowing and easy to believe. I thought it was great. Although it could have been a bit more creative, and have a twist to it somewhere. But great job 5/5

This one is really good! i loved it and the way it rhymed.. awesome job!!!!!! i enjoyed reading it! :0]

Good poem. Kind of short, but I like it.

5/5

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This poem was amazing... especially since I can relate to it quite a bit right now. :]] A wonderful poem about betrayal -- I love it. <3 Overall: 5.5

-- Stephanie Lynn .+.