Close my eyes forever

by kevin Boundy AKA the ghost   Oct 23, 2007


Every time I blink
I see your face
Its like your picture is burned into my mind
With no way to erase

But I wouldn't want it gone
Because I love to see you smile
And whenever I see you happy
It makes my life worth while

Your beauty haunts my mind
Like the ghosts of my past
But without you in my life
I would become an outcast

Living without you
Is like living without air
It's not possible and when you're around
All I can do is stare

Its only been a few hours
And I feel a pain in my heart
But I don't scream anymore because
Without you by my side its falling apart

Your picture is burned onto the back of my eyelids
With No way to erase
so I would keep my eyes closed forever
If it meant I would see your face

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  • 17 years ago

    by Teria

    Mkay, there's a lot I want to say about this poem.

    I'll start with the bad, mkay?

    Always remember it is = it's, you have a lot of its instead of it's; two different meanings.
    Third line in the first stanza could use a shortening.
    Along with the last stanza third line.

    The fourth stanza take out the word 'and' in the third line, it makes better sense and also helps the flow.

    Overall you did a wonderful job, hun. There's a few mistakes, and some flow problems. But, the emotion. . . is wonderful.
    The word choice, is almost flawless, a few tweaks and you'll be there.

    It's really good, don't get me wrong. I gave ti a 4|5 because of the little things that need tweaked though. :/

  • 17 years ago

    by Nula

    Aww thats beautiful...so cute.. i love it

  • 17 years ago

    by vintage darling

    This poem is well written.
    i like your rhyming.
    favorite stanza;
    Your beauty haunts my mind
    Like the ghosts of my past
    But without you in my life
    I would become an outcast

  • 17 years ago

    by Rachel

    Aw! this poem is really cute! thats all there is to it...displaying true meaning

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