Wow ... this truly blew me away.

Everything about it was amazing. The flow was solid and the language you use is engaging. You truly created a effective image of a heartbreaking story.

Well done *5/5*

Find a synonym for mouth for the second stanza. Ending coudl be stronger. Good concept, moving peice.

It was perfectly amazing! thats really great coz u write about ur father and the emotion was nice perfectly ended too.. 5/5

I really liked this poem. You described the madness of the father in a poetically and realistic kind of way. The choosing of words fitted this poem and the flow was great. 5/5

Oh holy crap..I'm almost in tears.

This was so heartbreaking to read, and yet so beautifully written at the same time.

The imagery you portrayed in this is amazing, it creates such vivid pictures for the reader, while your flow is perfect throughout.

Love the ending, so moving and intense.

This is really good although i have no father i can relate! he has been incarcerated for almost 17 years but now he's out and wants to hurt my family so i can relate!!!

This is really good. It happens in the world everyday and a child ends up being driven to insanity by the thoughts that a parent or someone hates them. You did a very good concept on capturing the moment and putting it into words. It kept me reading from the beginning to end. I really enjoyed reading it.
thanks
~*~Amber~*~