How sweet!!!!! It almost made me cry!!!

Greatly written, whole metaphor is excellent, and this piece is so deep. I like it from the beginning to the end, it is very original and refreshing.
Whole piece is very effective, with flawless flow and vivid descriptions.
Keep writing!

I agree with NyellMoonlight.

It was beyond amazing.
Incredible is the perfect word.
It was a very impress metaphor.
Perfectly flawless flow.
5/5
-Heather

Hey, is this inspired by the song 'vivica' from jack off jill? Anyhow, I love the flow of the words.. Stunningly beautiful.. You always come up with the most creative ideas to write about.. This poem is just extraordinary! Love every bit of it...

Wow thats just amazing. i related so well......wow...is all i can say. keep it up..

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" and mourns the loss, of a dream come true;
a dying fragment of a real girl,
ripping her hair out,
raking her face off,
crying her soul out,
but she's still so beautiful ...

.... to the mirror? "

great poem... impresively penned... loved it...

A dying fragment of a real girl,
ripping her hair out,
raking her face off,
crying her soul out,
but she's still so beautiful ...

.... to the mirror? "
--fav. part
this poem had a great message and the words you chose created such powerful images
5/5