In My Heart

by Cherish   Oct 23, 2007


You're in my heart for always
You're forever always mine
I feel an beautiful feeling
a feeling so Divine

I love you so much baby boy
I find it hard to express in words
We may find times a but tricky
All we have to do, is jump the herds

Every time the sun does shine
I always think of you
But even when it rains
i think of our moment too

Wiping the tear of my cheek
Holding on to you
a moment in the rain
a moment thats so true

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  • 17 years ago

    by Teria

    Mkay, darling. Let me start off telling you that this is an amazing poem, though it needs a few tweaks.

    The first stanza had 'for' and 'forever' and 'always' in it within TWO lines, which kinda messed up the flow mabye try ;
    You're always in my heart,
    and you're forever mine.
    ^^ That will even it out, and help the flow. Or just work with the 'for/forever/always' any way you want.
    Also in the first stanza; "an beautiful" should be 'a beautiful'. An only comes when a vowel follows, otherwise it's A.

    A few other minor things;
    of= off. on to =onto.
    And, when you capitalize your I's it looks neater.

    But, I gave you a 4|5 on this, because there were a few things but it was a great poem, with great emotion and very lovable.

    Keep it up, hun.

  • 17 years ago

    by Angel Of Death

    Awww i love this poem,
    i can relate to it sorta. 5/5
    keep up the great work
    xx love

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