by Melvin LeVeque Oct 23, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
What do I do when you say you don't care? |
Your poem was full of emotion pain and unrequited love it inspired a memory in me that I had almost forgotten. Another young man who died because he thought he would never be able to be with his love. He never got to see any of his tomorrows and I always wonder what good things were never done because he left too soon |
by Taylor
The raw emotion used to write this is really amazing. I think it takes guts to write about something like this. I looked at your other poems too and I think you should step away from rhymes. Not being so tangled in making everything rhyme will give you more freedom and let you be less literal. I know... I spent years only writing in rhymes, but its cool to try something new :) |
A poem with much pain and many clichés yet it hit the spot. Perhaps I am a sentimental fool but I have been there many years ago the frustration of loving someone who can't love you, you got it down to a tee the agony, the anger followed by despair and unable to understand why. An excellent poem long winded and cliched to death but it flowed great, |
Oh my god. |
by Krysten
Great poem. i could really feel the pain and emotion in it. im sorry that someone hurt you bad enough to create the inspiration for this...ive been there myself a time or two...but again great poem...keep up the good work....;D |