Pfff...I am a little speechless...you wrote so much in this one poem. You must have felt great once you finished it! I am going to put it in my favs too.

Take care ( I hope you are still around!)

5/5 Ingrid

Awwwz that is liike sooooooooooo sad.....but VERY well writen u should write more u are rele good!

Ok i don't really like poems about suicide and cutting but anyway.

you're really good at rhyming and rhythming.
and great how emotions gather throughout the poem: in the beginning it's just melancholy, and in the end - pain, blood, death.

i have some suggestions:
1) try to separate it into stanzas like:
What do I do when you say you don't care?
And the pain is far too deep for me to bear.
I wonder will you even notice I am gone?
Will you come to my funeral to say so long?

Will you see me in my coffin, and kiss my head?
It's hurts to know the only kiss ill get from you, is when I'm dead.
But why did it have to be this way?
It was you, nobody else, who got me from day to day.

etc.
it just makes it easier to read, u know

2) i don't think it's a good idea to call your poem "sad poem" and another your poem "sad poem II". i don't know maybe it was your special concept but if i were u i'd make a more eye-catching and intriguing tittle. Maybe something like "The last kiss"
or "A funeral kiss" or something like that.

and another thing: your life depends on you, only on you, you can't blame anyone for making you love them, for making you suffer, for making you cut. ok i know sounds banal but that was just what i think abt your poem in general.

ps. trust me. u tried to cut 2 years ago. now i know it's soooo damn stupid. feelings pass, pain passes. it's not worth your precious life.

Good job keep it up!

I like this alot it has long of emothion and depth to it you can really get in to it

Wow this is an amazing poem absolutely loved it
5/5
Excellent, Amazing, Fantastic, Beautiful Job!!

OMG!! how sad!!!!..it didnt precisly make me cry,but it was soooo beyond good!!!!..wow!!..u did a total fab job!!!!
You put lots of emotion and power into this, it was great!
i love how u ended it. it was awsum!!!
Totaly awsum job!
hehe i prov. said that ten times allready..
anyways..
5/5
Aly

It feels like Ive died a thousand times inside
Holding you a little closer, just a little more in my mind.

So sad.. I think you should format the second part so that it flows from this to that.. Or you could make this part more like the second.. Either way that part needs some work. That's really the only thing I can really suggest for you to do.. Nice work.

I love this poem!!

my fav bit is
Will you see me in my coffin, and kiss my head?
It's hurts to know the only kiss ill get from you, is when I'm dead

its seems so desperate but in a good way, if a chick read this she would all head over heels!!!

Great job
i love it!!!

5/5 (sorry typo)
10/5 (Not typo)

:)

Omg i love this poem!!! i give it a 5/5!!

Omg i love this poem!! i give it a 5/5!!! XD

Omg i love this poem!! i give it a 5/5!!! XD

OMG really great poem i really loved it!! great job 5/5

This poem is just as gud as ur the next one... i have to read more

this poem made me cry.... it cuts close to home... the one bout ryan... it made me feel so bad... it so moving this poems... keep riting

baby XD

I thought it was pretty well done, a few spelling mistakes and a couple lines didn't really rhyme but it wasn't horrible. The end seemed a bit forced like you were running out of words and just ended it. Sometimes removing a couple words and using just one word that means the same will help with flow... good job though overall

This poem is beyond any doubt the most touching thing i've ever read! it's so simple and heartfelt.

Ok first and formost i loved your poem its so sweet and it makes the writer seem hes really at a vulnerable point it was amazing and i can relate extremely well to the feelings behind this so its a favorite for me :)

"My heart is on fire, it is not to appealing."
ok this is probably my favorite line ive never heard it expressed that way it seems original its just really appealing

"It feels like Ive died a thousand times inside
Holding you a little closer, just a little more in my mind."
and i love this too the thought of holding on to that person simply in memories and thoughts but if you let that go youd have nothing so you keep remembering :)

"But I would die a million times, if we could just be friends."
i really like this too because it shows a different affection towards that person which you did a great job of conveying

"Someone please tell me what this torture is for.
I really don't want to love you anymore."
now here id have to ask if you were serious? can you honestly say you dont love her anymore? id think not based on the rest of the poem but the abandonment feeling in these lines is amazing

i love this poems im deffinatly gonna add it as a favorite its so sweet and sad i wanna cry but i guess its just your mark of being a good writer BRAVO!!

Great poem. i could really feel the pain and emotion in it. im sorry that someone hurt you bad enough to create the inspiration for this...ive been there myself a time or two...but again great poem...keep up the good work....;D

Oh my god.
this is such a great poem!
seriously, i love it!
i can absolutely picture all of this in my head and it is so easy to feel what you're feeling. It's a really good work. awesome poem! 5/5

A poem with much pain and many clichés yet it hit the spot. Perhaps I am a sentimental fool but I have been there many years ago the frustration of loving someone who can't love you, you got it down to a tee the agony, the anger followed by despair and unable to understand why. An excellent poem long winded and cliched to death but it flowed great,
5/5 Ray S