That made sense to me, it was really good. I could totally picture that. That would be a really cool part in a story. ^_^ <33

Well as I've almost come to expect from you now, its typealicious (I made that a word)

Its a beautifully dark poem.
Such vibrant imagery used throughout .. you truly have a beautifully twisted mind Danielle.

Although I normally prefer poems with a rhyme structure, this does work well without one. Simply because it's so descriptive - almost like a short story.

Very nice work, and I'm sure I will be checking up on your other poems ... Wait .. not that I'm stalking you or anything .. it's just for the poetry .. Stop typing...

Good work.

~Pete.

Nice poem you are a great dark writer. 5/5
-vino

Wow. o.o At the beginning, you somehow manage to create emotion through describing what is there rather than imagery. I especially like this verse

Dancing with the devil, your waltz is slow
Dancing with an angel, your step quickens with your heart
Dancing with yourself, your tango is frightening