Fallen Apart

by Tammie   Oct 24, 2007


If I sewed all the prettiest words together just for you,
Would it save us from this relentless bitter end?
Do your bloodshot eyes and harsh words mean you're sorry,
Or was that from another night alone you had to spend?

Thinking about your screwed up, self-indulged life,
It makes you angry that your death in the making, doesn't it?
Well don't blame it on me; I'll stop you before you start,
You made your own mistakes, don't put it on me one bit.

Friendships consist of more than one person that cares, so they say.
Did you ever think of anyone else from the very start?
Or just drag them along through your hell of a life,
Not taking their advice, as you slowly fall apart.

Diary entries and suicide notes scattered around your room
As you sit listening to the song we used to call ours
'Everything I ever did was all for you, all for you'
Remembering us scream those lyrics together for hours.

Those pretty words I sewed together all for you,
Have now become your daisy chain noose.
The end was more than bitter and less than heartfelt and
The nuts and bolts of our friendship have finally come loose.

** If you can think of a better title, feel free to suggest it to me. :] **

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  • 17 years ago

    by Polaroid

    That reminds me of one of my friends who have been really depressed latley

    very well written you are truly an amazing person

  • 17 years ago

    by Prophecies In Kodak

    "Diary entries and suicide notes scattered around your room"

    That line kind of put me off. I didnt really like it very much. Otherwise, this poem was quite bitter and lovely. The emotion was fluid.

    You did a wonderful job.

  • 17 years ago

    by Mousie

    It was good, something i can relate to for the most part, and i really thought you had some good wording and good vocab in there. It could use some tweeking but i think all poems can when you go back and really look at them. Good job though, you're a talented writer with a lot of feeling in yours poems and i like that.

  • 17 years ago

    by Tim

    Its like i felt it... you wrote this so well

  • 17 years ago

    by perfectlyBROKEN

    This Is Really Great And Your Words In This Are So Powerful And Real And Passionate.. Broken Friendshipz Suck And You Wonder What You Have Done To Deserve Them.. Some Parts In This I Can Relate Too And YOur Flow And Your Way Of Expressing Things were Really Well Done.. Loved It 5/5
    Ceck Out My Poemz If You Like
    perfectlyBROKEN xx