Look Up (Haiku)

by abracadabra   Oct 24, 2007


Said tree to its shade:
You pester me with your drifts!
The sun laughed above.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Oh ..very nice
    I love it a lot, ur 1st line was new for me, or i havent seen a haiku with such form yet
    which why Ill add it to my fav.

    the way u ended it, made an impressions too,
    word choice just fit!!

    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    A charming piece...

    Forgive me for insinuating myself in here but, for some reason,(I think it's the laughing part) this haiku reminded me of a little piece I wrote years ago (haikus seem to have an affinity for each other..;-) anyway..

    Crying Love
    strong moon didn't laugh
    song wolves danced toward silver blues
    crying Love was found