by LisaXmarie Oct 25, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Echoing voices scream in my head |
by Ariana
I'd suggest working a bit on your syllable count in this piece as improving this would make it flow much better. However I did enjoy this write, I really liked your word choice and the raw emotion you conveyed. I thought the first line was quite a good opening as it really thrusts the reader into your situation. |
by cheyanne
This is an excellent poem. Something to add to the favorites list. |