Tis a good poem steph, few mistakes but still very good, flows pretty well, i give it a 5/5!!! keep them coming!!!

I liked it. It don't think you are finished yet, to me it seems that you have stopped in the middle. I know what you mean by this because I have went threw this same thing. I just got tired of trying so hard, if that person didn't want to be with me why try so hard to make it right? I wish you the best of luck.

How about "kept on a string" for a title?

Take care,

5/5 Ingrid ( kerels...je kunt niet mét en niet zonder ze!!! Sterkte, meisje)

I know the feeling, well, sort of. I can tell how you felt.

Nice poem, very strong words and meaning. Although in the third stanza I believe you wanted to say "to MAKE the relationship work"

Other than that petty detail, good piece. Keep up the great work!

This poem was very nice.
the flow was nice and i liked the ryhming you had in it.
its a really relateable topic as well.

"Its like I'm doing everything,
to keep this relationship work.
Making some time free,
just for you and me."

i loved that stanza !
well done =]

cindy 5/5

Aww amazing! This is what I'm going through right now, so it really touched me. I hope it works out for you how you want it to. Poem was very easy to read and connect with and strong emotions you are displaying here.
Really enjoyed this!
5/5 Keep up!

Awww this is a sad poem...i love it it though, great job, i know how you feel! i'll igve ya a 5/5 =)

Its a great poem and a great title. 5/5

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Great poem
i think the title works fine for it
but im kinda late on commenting so someone probably already said a good suggestion eh
well you still did a great job so congrats
and thx for the comment

Keenan

You made this poem while your totally confused, am i right? coz it comprises a lot of questions. i know you can bring something more vivid than this but it is still a nice poem. in some angles it jumps that made it a bit rocky.

Questions many of us have asked while in relationships that feel one-sided. If both aren't willing to nurture the relationship...eventually it will wither away and die like a flower that no one has watered.

I could nit pick on some of the grammar again...but I'll hold off this time lol. If you care to hear my suggestions you can send me a message about it :)

Good poem thanks for your comment on my poem "Recipe for insanity

Well i think the title is just fine...the title realli suits the poem...it musta be based on a true incident...glad tt u managed to share with us this great sad poem

What did I do wrong?
Why didn't you come?
I thought you wanted to see me,
I guess this moment wasn't meant to be.

A very good begin... It reminds me of myself, a couple years ago...

I have been thinking a lot lately,
about you and me.
I am always asking you,
when do you have time for two?

I really enjoyed this stanza... especially the last two verses... in simple words you just described the feeling so wonderfully...
yet i am not very sure if "lately" and "me" rhyme... it sounds a little bit weird...

Its like I'm doing everything,
to make this relationship work.
Making some time free,
just for you and me.

Again, this really sounds familiar to me... I really enjoy how I can relate to this poem...
yet maybe you could try to use less "me" at the end of the verse... it sounds a little bit repetitive...

You didn't come,
you just went home.
So I'm asking myself what went wrong?
We have been together for so long.

this is really a great ending... The simplicity of the wording, contrasting with the depth of the feeling just amazes me...
I just loved the last two verses...

5/5

*keep going*
isabel