Comrades in Arms

by PygmyPuff   Oct 26, 2007


Up and up and up.
Higher and higher
goes my sense of pride.

Divided we stand,
And it is divided
how we will fall.

Ready to take action.
I'm indignant and outraged
with such actions.

For a simple action,
t'was a great leap
over self-respect.

Down further and further.
Dispite the previous joys
it's time we separate.

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  • 16 years ago

    by MEGZ is wondering what to do about life

    It doesnt have the same rhyme sceam but i still love it... you do amazing work.... and well i didnt really find anything wrong with it... so GODD JOB!

  • 16 years ago

    by Lauren Waszkiewicz

    Dispite- Despite

    hi Katherine.
    I shall comment your poem! Ye Gods!

    Well aspects are eccentric, and could easily be misunderstood. the flow could have been better, simply adding a break between lines does not make them separate. Liked the theme/ story though.

    Not bad, Sister. Not bad.

  • 16 years ago

    by Indian Comma Bean

    Very interesting and unique, loved the choice of words and the flow, great write = )

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